I wrote this for Three Word Wednesday. This week’s words were grin, jumble and naked.
Engaged
he strides the beach with
a joyful bounce in his step,
nervous grin upon his face and
a small velvet box in his pocket
he reminds himself not to
mumble through his speech,
jumble the careful phrases
or sweat too much-
she loves him, and he knows
she is going to say yes
but he wants it to be
perfection for them both
he remembers that she walks
this stretch of beach on Tuesdays
after work, and wants to surprise
his love at her favourite spot
and surprise her he does
with a high cry of dismay,
naked as the day she was born
wrapped up in a coworker.
© Bridget Noonan, 2011.
I have done much better.
For one thing, the title is too punny. And there’s not enough buildup. The whole thing feels cliche. I need to get the emotion to come across more strongly. Ugh.
UNsatisfied with my work this weekend, as you might have guessed.
beespoetry 